Re: The Businessman by abcmonkey78 |
12-Jun-04/11:13 AM |
To set the stage for this, I wrote this for school. We have to write a series of prologues, as there was in the book Canterbury Tales by Geoffry Chaucer. The idea is that 4 people are moving over to Amsterdam. So, as they arrive onboard their plane, the flight attendant describes each person in turn.
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Re: a comment on The Unknown Soldier by abcmonkey78 |
12-Jun-04/10:57 AM |
Maybe this for that line?
"And all the more I contemplate it, fear disgruntles death."
And possibly this to replace the "navy" like ending, which I understand could be awkward.
"For my generation's limb shall be the one torn off the tree."
And finally, yes, I have very little education as to where semicolons should be placed. So if you raise an eyebrow to any, it's got a high possibility of being misplaced.
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Re: a comment on Roses by abcmonkey78 |
8-Jun-04/10:25 PM |
i dunno what "iambic" or "trochaic" mean, although i would like to know... I just wrote this just following equal syllables and stanzas in each peice. :\
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