| Re: how i love by elizabethann |
25-Mar-04/2:48 PM |
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Still, it's nice. A humble poet is not to be taken lightly :)
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25-Mar-04/3:02 PM |
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Good work, makes you think and connect on different levels. It's too bad that childhood really messes us up as adults.
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| Re: The second coming by cleverdevice |
28-Mar-04/8:55 PM |
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IMHO, the 4th paragraph needs just a little work, spelling on accompanied? "proclaimed a good" also confuses me just a little.
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| Re: Eyes by tre |
30-Mar-04/6:15 PM |
Just curious, were you stalking him?
I like the imagery in the last line, a smile, like a lie, through the teeth :)
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31-Mar-04/12:38 PM |
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It's safer this way I think, it can be the perfect love, internal, without complications. Love on the inside... Good Job!
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1-Apr-04/4:26 AM |
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I don't know what's going to get you into more trouble. Homosexuals thinking you're comparing them to Jews, or the Jews thinking you're saying theyâre homosexuals. Watch it or you'll find either your bunghole or portfolio violated. Could be both! :)
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| Re: A Dangling Poo by zodiac |
1-Apr-04/4:42 AM |
Okay, I get what you mean by "original" now. Just a suggested edit on verse three, "cause I'm Klinger" is good, but maybe "cause I'm a Klinger" would be better?
Otherwise a simply marvelous feast,
on the unknown thoughts of a constipated nugget of furry waste :)
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