on some deleted poem
10 May 2002, 12:17 PM
That second line in parentheses has a real conversational feel to it. I read it in the voice of Memento's narratar when he said "which I read religiously." The syntax doesn't work for me.
on some deleted poem
13 May 2002, 7:03 PM
I like this. The title could be better. And I'd leave the ASCII Art. That's kind of like putting clipart on a manuscript you're submitting for publication--not appropriate.