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As I sit (Free verse) by hamgurl

As I sit I think of my past and present All the things I should have done I think of all the batttles I've fought And how some I should of won I think of all the people I'd made happy And some that I've made sad I think of all the people I've gave up on When truth be known them I could have had I think of all the friends I've made By simply saying hello I think of all I didnt say To people I also might know I think of all the feelings I've had And how I possibly could commit I've learned thats somethings I thought were true Were truly the opposite I've learned to sometimes follow my heart Even if it leads to a dead end And even when ending a relationship To always still keep the friend.

Tarquin De La Bog 19-Aug-02/5:05 PM
I have vomit all over me thanks to this. 0. The kind of rot found in only the very worst greeting cards. For the final two lines alone you should be punished by hard labour. Disgusting. It's made even worse by the poem initially disguising itself as a quite possibly half-decent philosophical little ditty, before regressing into the slush from Hell.




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