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Quintus: Lesson 1 (Other) by richa

His mind withdraws, like the tongue, too far back to swallow the water of a lake, green as moss. 'What colour would you prefer, you must drink' says the tutor. 'Make it the pale blue I know as water' 'but pale blue is the sky; the green is the eye of the sycamore that looks down on your lake. Drink, for you can see the fishes.'

zodiac 22-Apr-04/6:22 AM
Some of the punctuation is a little awry. For what it's worth:

His mind withdraws, like the tongue,
too far back to swallow
the water of a lake, green as moss.

'What colour would you prefer,
you must drink' says the tutor.

'make it the pale blue I know as water.'

'but pale blue is the sky;

green is the eye of the sycamore
that looks down on your lake.

Drink, for you can see the fishes.'

Otherwise, ace.




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