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Dear M Foucault, or, How I knew our relationship was doomed (Sestina) by zodiac

Do you hold words so dear that you hold words – so? Dear, that do. Hold words so dear that you do words that do hold you so, dear – so dear. That you hold – Do words, dear, that do you. Hold words so that. Do you? (hold words?) So, dear.

zodiac 20-Apr-04/4:28 PM
1) Zoetrope is not a poetry publication.
2) Agents do not frequent anything, least of all online workshops.
3) Many of us are already published; you are not.
4) as an adverb, it's "too"; as a preposition, "to". We don't have to be sophisticated to know that.
5) This is a recent comment from the "mature,talented and classy" online poetry workshop, allpoetry.com: "This poem is a great start. I love the last two lines especially [All the time I spend thinking, Is the biggest waste of all.] I certainly know how that feels, spending so much time worrying and thinking it takes a while to realize NOT worrying and thinking so much would have been a lot less stressful and a lot more productive... I share your pain! Anyways the only criticism I have for this piece is: Maybe you could try experimenting with NOT ending almost all the lines in prepositions. Prepositions make things choppier and almost sound like you ended in the middle of an idea without ever getting to the punchline. Anyways, keep writing! I'll be back!"
6) Such comments are crap to the nth degree.
7) You are a nincompoop. Did you see my response to your comment on this page? Do you understand it?




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