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Reno (Lyric) by <{Baba^Yaga}>

Billy doesn't like to go to school. He'd rather play hooky instead you see. Mother drops him off at a quarter 'til 8:00, But then he takes a cab into the city? You can tell that he's looking for something. He waits at a park bench hoping his dad will walk by. Leon lives deep in Sun Valley. The largest trailer park in Washoe County. We play Dungeons & Dragons every day. He's the smartest kid that I've ever seen. He's into Isaac Asimov, and J.R Tolkien. Gave me the book Shardik, and it changed my life. Sarah lives in a mortuary. Her father sells death for a living you see. She paints her nails black, and she wears it too. The other kids call her "Vampire freak". She writes to Ann Rice, each and every week. I wrote to Stan Rice instead about 'Some Lamb'. Jezebel doesn't sleep no more. Her big brother knows what she's good for. He tells her to "shut up", and "keep it down". He has been doing this since mom went away. Their father started it as a game they'd play. Robbing them of any chance to be set free. My life was all about moving around. A pointless search were nothing and void were found. Then I looked with a laugh one day. I had been staring all that time at the ground. And hanging around at the lost and found. Sometimes you have to amputate your past to save today.

<~> 18-Aug-02/6:20 AM
7-7-7 for the others, and this one's called reno. coincidence? i think not. you give yourself away with the last, here. did you mean to? and the dangling letters, are you just flaunting it to get the bile a-flowing on the dark side? back to the poem--why not tie them all up at the end? i like neat packages, and you are using more structure with b^y, so why not take it the next step?




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