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Three Bears (Lyric) by hotwire

Bily Foster This is a story of three bears goldie locks i could be three bears that helped me reshape me the way i want to be one bear was my baby kept him close to me the second builds my body keeps me from scorning me the third releases my desires and really sets me free three bears in my world aren't harmfull at all you see three bears in my fairy world means meaty men to me i'll never forget those bears hold them dear will thee happy ever after with my three bears will i be one bear i see daily sleep with actually the second i see weekly work me over does he the third i see often or when i'm feelin week Three bears in my world aren't harmfull at all you see three bears in my fairy world means meaty men to me I'll never forget those bears hold them dear will thee happy ever after with my three bears will i be

hypatia 9-Apr-04/11:14 AM
Yes, it's different and cute too. Check some grammar though:
"hold them dear will thee" ??
"or when i'm feelin week" should be weak.




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