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Alone (Free verse) by Deluxotron

Look there! A boy age 10. Sitting on the playground By himself. No one will play with him. Watch! His lower lip quivers Fighting back tears. Look there! A boy age 16 Standing outside the school dance By himself. No one will dance with him. Watch! His hand covers his face Hiding his tears. Look there! A boy age 18 Sitting in his room By himself. No one will listen to him. Watch! His lower lip quivers Tears turn to rage. Look there! A boy age 23 Writing this very poem By himself. No one cares about him. Watch! His wrists bleed from Self-inflicted wounds. Look there! A corpse Laying in a coffin By himself.

Deluxotron 6-Apr-04/11:30 PM
Wow, hey all I want is some honest feedback. Which you gave me. So, kudos for you.




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