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Alone (Free verse) by Deluxotron

Look there! A boy age 10. Sitting on the playground By himself. No one will play with him. Watch! His lower lip quivers Fighting back tears. Look there! A boy age 16 Standing outside the school dance By himself. No one will dance with him. Watch! His hand covers his face Hiding his tears. Look there! A boy age 18 Sitting in his room By himself. No one will listen to him. Watch! His lower lip quivers Tears turn to rage. Look there! A boy age 23 Writing this very poem By himself. No one cares about him. Watch! His wrists bleed from Self-inflicted wounds. Look there! A corpse Laying in a coffin By himself.

zodiac 6-Apr-04/4:33 AM
Hey, I wanted you to know I thought this was a really well-written lyric reminiscent of the ______ian ramblings of Mr _______ with some clever half-rhymes too, but it's my policy to give any poem which refers to suicide an automatic zero. The reason I do this is that have good reason to believe that ninety-nine percent of suicidals are just attention-grubbing whiners who think they're fucking Kurdnt Kobbayne or Sylvia Plath and that giving them pity, praise, or any kind of attention at all only encourages their self-aggrandizing gothic tendencies. You say, what the fuck do you know, you fucking asshole? or something along those lines. To which I say, I know more people who've successfully (and unsuccessfully) committed suicide than you, and I've gotten sick to death of it. Don't come barking up my tree on this, I have rabies. Good day.




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