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Old Glory (Concrete) by Richard

/----------------------------------------------------------------\ | O L D | not a name to be used, taken lightly, casually | | |------------------------------------------------| | G L O R Y | it comes from within but humbly asserts itself | | |------------------------------------------------| | B R A V E | tiding, good omen for oppressed people worldly | | |------------------------------------------------| | S Y M B O L | this a new nation meant for, and by the people | | |------------------------------------------------| | A Y O U N G | man pledges daily allegiance, piously, serving | | |------------------------------------------------| | N A T I O N | earning its name through pride, and assistance | | |------------------------------------------------| | S E R V I N G | without regard for race, creed, origin, or God | | |------------------------------------------------| | F R E E D O M | the most basic human right to live, and breath | | |------------------------------------------------| | H O N O R | those who came before and those yearning daily | |----------------------------------------------------------------| | For a life without subjugation or a lingering death to slavery | |----------------------------------------------------------------| | Standing tall as a beacon of hope, soaring higher than tyranny | |----------------------------------------------------------------| | Raised by those whose hearts are full of expectation for peace | |----------------------------------------------------------------| | Colors, never running, waving honorably in the wind of freedom | \----------------------------------------------------------------/

Shuushin 29-Mar-04/4:57 PM
Nice concrete.

These are unusual enough that I won't fault you for the content - which isn't so horrible as _others_ may lead you to believe...

As a concrete - an 8




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