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Thoughts in a cloud above the Catskills (Free verse) by Enkidu

Time to cry my fairytale to rest Dreams of skywriting seems To me so flat at that I jest The words of Saints in blackened ivory braille Fate in the clouds of late Which infer my words with a gale Once more a crown of lightness does forsake Grace and narrow embrace That atone my own vicious ache

richa 24-Feb-04/8:45 AM
OK I quite like triple rhyme, just a few things dont track.

You are crying... why do you jest.

Blackened ivory -- ivory is a cream colour, why would you blacken it, especially for use as braille.

The final verse.





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