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In a Single Moment (Free verse) by mozac

In a single moment of times eternal past of a painted future and a known mystery I hold in my hands a tainted heart a forlorn imagination of a mystic self between you and I as a taut string in my chest Vibrating silently Yearning to make sound I am what I am not Do i feel pleasure in this discord in this, stabbing pain between every beat a lingering end within a certain wish of a beautiful end Wishful beginnings Perhaps, a fortuitous vision to help me see what i already know whats already seen in myself I must awaken from myself

Tarquin De La Bog 14-Aug-02/5:06 PM
Crap. 2. You want to take heed of the last two lines of your poem sir. Wake up, and then try to write something which isn't so utterly dismal.




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