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Something's gone wrong (Pimple) by zodiac

A half-empty glass of water sits on your bedside table, among tissues and brown bottles. A wrong number getting me up late, it hits me suddenly about the glass and undoes a night’s good sleep: yeah, something’s amiss here; something’s definitely gone wrong. And it’s a long night coming; solitary cars buzz by outside on the highway, and the hiss and catch and hiss of your breathing like an old song goes: something’s wrong, wrong. If I were young enough to shake you awake, call it quits, step out of the house into the throng- ing dark, I know I couldn’t because what's wrong - I am. So I kiss your damp hair thinking you'll wake late from this dead sleep, and maybe tell me what it was about me I ought to have noticed all along.

Shuushin 5-Feb-04/3:07 PM
HA! I just looked at the top 20 - yep. That's a little skewed!

But I figure there's a few that actually deserve to be up there. The ones that are there, if they are not among the best on poemranker, they are, at least, the best that I can muster (though I personally wouldn't put them in that particular order).

It will correct itself and I'll maybe have a couple few left there.




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