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So Much**coment this sucks. I want to make it better (Free verse) by Freethinker1602

I don't know how much you mean to me It creates so much trouble Brings me closer to pain when I say good bye It scares me when I think I might not see you again I hate that there are so many things to take you from me My heart was made to be broken And you are the one made to mend it None of this is about loving, cuz all it is is caring Oh I treasure it all so much And most of all your touch Come kiss me again because it feels so good I want to wake up next to you each morning It's weird to fall asleep next to you And weirder to wake up with out you there at all So come hold me for now because this isn't forever Show me that we can both have today And remember today tomorrow cuz yesterday can never be taken away

zodiac 27-Jan-04/10:38 AM
"coment this sucks. I want to make it better" makes me think you wanted this. What was I supposed to say? Excellent cliche in line 6 - some great ambiguity in the endless run-on phrasing. Oh, wait - or was I just supposed to praise it? That's for rockmage, not me.




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