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So Much**coment this sucks. I want to make it better (Free verse) by Freethinker1602

I don't know how much you mean to me It creates so much trouble Brings me closer to pain when I say good bye It scares me when I think I might not see you again I hate that there are so many things to take you from me My heart was made to be broken And you are the one made to mend it None of this is about loving, cuz all it is is caring Oh I treasure it all so much And most of all your touch Come kiss me again because it feels so good I want to wake up next to you each morning It's weird to fall asleep next to you And weirder to wake up with out you there at all So come hold me for now because this isn't forever Show me that we can both have today And remember today tomorrow cuz yesterday can never be taken away

Freethinker1602 27-Jan-04/10:31 AM
you missed the mark of analization totally, kudos for trying. I've heard people say you mean a lot to me and all that who ha but one can only imagine that some one has said I don't know how much you mean, it is common to think this.

2. Poetry, to me, is all about writing down what you feel. It doesn't matter if you write something all ready said, because to the writer, it is personal. To me this is my personal struggle.

3. My thoughts are broken and incomplete and mixed and jumbled, hense the line break problem. Tell me how I can think in a more fluid way and my poems will becom better congealed and more concreate.

4. I almost never ever punctuate poems, ICKY.




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