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sea of pearls (Free verse) by crwncka1

the tides are beginning to return in from the vast ocean, of love felt deep within me from the very core existence, with a natural flow that casts away every last separate, desire between us to form the completion of the union, of true wholeness that like a swan song is gracefully, blending with the unknown and unseen forces at work, forming the merger from the soul level of our existence, being shaped on the outer realm entirely now as one, a true vision of focus is now appearing in my eyesight, as I now become fully aware in looking though her eyes, what I felt from all the back to beginning to be true love, I find to be the long lost missing part of me deep within, as the moment in truth has now arrived for us with time, becoming like a sacred burning torch to show the way, back home for us now as our paths are coming together, now showing a way for her to follow on my inner journey, that is becoming ours to share in wholly as the universe, is taking full control over our nature with the intention, from the source of creation that exists entirely over us, working now as the force forming this union of marriage, that we may share together in a vision becoming clear, that lay in store with time now directing like a play, the course of action necessary in order to take me away, from this old place that forever has haunted over me, like a underground ground prison existing in my mind, now becoming dust falling though the air vanishing away, to reveal a fresh surface forming past the dark tunnel, that only is seen though my sharply tuned inner vision, as the future though a moment in time clearly seen as, the jewel used to capture her heart with all of my love

crwncka1 20-Jan-04/6:46 AM
too intelligent for any real feedback... come on lamers need constructive critisim

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