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Keep it... or let it go (Free verse) by imperfect_creation

Slipping my hands off this glass, it seems, i've shatterd your drink on the floor. Now all of your tears from the past are gone with the people them for. Your future is now in my grasp. I'm holding it tight; not letting it go. Though your dreams I may never have, so much of me still needs to grow! So much of my soul may never show. So much of me still... I may never know. I'm sorry for being so mean to you. I'm sorry for spilling your drink. I'm sorry for not knowing what i will do. I'm sorry for making you think. I'm sorry i'm such a heart teaser. I really don't mean to be mean to you. I have fuck-you juice in my freezer. I would be happy to share it with you.

Christof 16-Jan-04/5:11 AM
'are gone with the people them for'? Do you mean 'they're'? One thought doesn't lead to another in this poem. How do you 'have' another person's dreams? Unless you're spookily in their head at the same time as them. Yipe. Gosh I'm grumpy today.




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