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New Leaf (Lyric) by dragonfly

As does the fog of the bay creep he comes to blanket me and all my usual worries do not matter now as I revel in the beauty that lies in the sight of him asleep And so the walls I built erode to debris My only defense is a pile at my feet I'm turning a new leaf He drifts along in the upsweep of a stream that empties into me and he takes refuge in my keep and all my usual worries do not matter now as I'm watching him asleep And so the walls I built erode to debris My only defense is a pile at my feet And this is a battle I will not retreat I'm turning a new leaf

tuthaliash 2-Jan-04/10:15 AM
Interesting syntax in the first couple of lines...I found myself wanting more of it. Still, very nice...I haven't heard such a pleasant, concise description of the willing vulnerability of love in some time.




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