Shuushin16 Nov 2003

I have to say the simple sentiment is refreshing, and that sentiment is consistent with the language.

Imagine what you could convey with a broader toolset?

show me what the wings look like, show me more of that view; how, exactly, does the earth look through the clouds.

Can you make a play with the wings as clouds (another poem, perhaps)?

that last sentence - you shouldn't have to tell me that, I should read the thing and say it to myself.

Have an -8- with points for encouragement.