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Angel (Lyric) by mistaric

Here I stand, on the edge of a brand new day The sun is shining, brightly leading the way I breathe in the trees, and the air all around me From out of nowhere you finally found me You’re an angel, Sent from up above You’re an angel, You’re the one I love You’re an angel, How can it be, That the way I feel about you Is how you feel about me I hear the wind whispering in the trees I smell the scent of your perfume blowing in the breeze The sound of your voice calling from the heavens beyond The way my life’s changed, it’s like you waved a magic wand You’re an angel, Sent from up above You’re an angel, You’re the one I love You’re an angel, How can it be, That the way I feel about you Is how you feel about me You build me up, I feel on top of the world I want to shout from the top of the mountain, that you’re my girl Loving and caring Talking and sharing More precious to me than diamonds and pearls And as the sun sets, and nite starts to fall The stars are shining, and I take in it all Your eyes reflecting, in the light of the moon You came into my life, and not a minute too soon You’re an angel, Sent from up above You’re an angel, You’re the one I love You’re an angel, How can it be, That the way I feel about you Is how you feel about me And as I close my eyes, fall gently into sleep Each nite I pray to the lord, that you’re mine to keep And I thank him, for putting you in my days All my dreams came true, you never cease to amaze You’re an angel, Sent from up above You’re an angel, You’re the one I love You’re an angel, How can it be, That the way I feel about you Is how you feel about me

thepinkbunnyofdoom 7-Aug-03/1:53 AM
Yuck. If I knew the proper spelling of the sound of vomiting I'd do it right now. This poem is so trite that I didn't get past the second line of the 4th stanza. Have you no consideration for others? If this is the kinda of poetry your going to write, stop right now. I mean it. I rarely give zeros, but this deserves one too much. I'll be nice and leave it at where my comment stands. On the bright side at least it shouldn't be too hard to for improvement, cause hopefully not everything you'll write can be this bad. -0-




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