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I sat for an hour to watch a spider (Free verse) by Jimbo

July 26, 2003 ~ I sat for an hour to watch a spider ~ Daydreaming I suppose Staring out the window Thinking of something beautiful Suddenly something caught my eye A tiny spider dancing before my face ~ Up and down - side to side Back and forth it moved so swiftly I'd never sat to watch this before Swinging swiftly from end to end Arching its web ~ Gently draping silken threads So finely woven just barely visible The spider moved so quick It certainly had a mission Its threads to catch tonight's dinner maybe? ~ This tiny almost alien creature Building its home upon a window screen So intent on weaving its web I thought to myself just one swift breeze And it will be gone forever ~ I compared the web to a life I've known Working so diligently Caring loving and sharing Giving all that's possible Then suddenly under a small strain all can be gone ~ Thom

Jimbo 31-Jul-03/9:16 PM
Yeah OK, the slicked back hair should really go, you're much too young for that style. The guitar playing, well, lessons would be a difinite plus. (My 19 year old kid is better at it). Voice lessons......Christ they're only 60 bucks an hour, ya gottta be paying more then that just to show off your bullshit at the site. That is unless you are making money there, but I sort of doubt that. Dont ya think its a bit ostentatious? I mean all the bragging and stuff? But I guess wisdom comes with age, and who should know that better then me!
Seriously, it's too bad Jim Henson died, you would make a great replacement for Kermit. Or you could have told Bert and Ernie to move over.
I hope you're enjoying yourself with all that useless time you spent to create such a piece of shit. No wonder the Internet is going to waste. The only thing I found missing on you site was Viagra for sale (I WOULD HAVE BOUGHT IT!) and you offered nothing for penis enlargement, that really was a bummer, I was disappointed, not to mention reduced mortgage rates. Other then that, not bad really. I''ll give you a 9 on it.




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