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A Sullen Moon (Free verse) by Jimbo

July 20, 2003 ~ A Sullen Moon ~ Sitting here gazing skyward Staring towards the heavens I see no moon this night I know it’s there but out of sight It hasn’t fallen like I have It lingers someplace the same as me Biding its time waiting for a newer day Like myself awaiting another way ~ Hidden there behind the covers of clouds Much the way I must hide what I feel The silence of the moon suspended above Brings such feelings of want and love How true it is when I am sad To have a friend like you The touch of your hands . . .the look in your eyes When I hold you in my arms I cannot help but to cry ~ On the night of the moon We kissed again with tears Thinking of happiness and nothing more Two of us and the moon we adore Morose at times when I’m near you Knowing how well you know Kissing and touching and holding you near Wanting to forever to hold you dear ~ Outstretched arms the curves of your body That everlasting smile And yes the eyes so very much your eyes Speaking to me softly of love in your guise Wanting to become you for brief moments To feel all that you feel and want all that you need You are the rose upon my bloom yes my Rose And gently I’d remove your petals like cloths ~ Lowering each branch so I can choose As the moon passes over the horizon Surly and irritable because it cannot be so I will hold you ever so tightly and never let go So much in need of the quietness of your love From head to toe I love you so Sorry at times you’ve crossed the threshold of grief How much can this heart bear without being a thief ~ I’ll serve you in love to make life worthwhile And love you forever if forever it takes Hold you so close the beat of two hearts becoming one The sullen moon will shine and smile as the sun Singing out My Rhapsody for you As you sing in your colorata like pink pirouette With lips as sweet as babies breath A sullen moon I’ll hold your head and have you rest ~ Thom

Jimbo 31-Jul-03/8:50 PM
Alright, alright..I decided to read up on what the fuck poetry is REALLY about. Forget the peanut butter and jelly sandwiches! No Harley for me either, and although I've not been on Hamburger hill, but have eaten hills of hamburgers, I have been THERE, but they had different names. But that was WAY before your time anyway.
Truthfully, I have to say, between you and Angle food cake, I've had a good laugh. FUCK! I didnt realize someone could tear a new asshole so easliy as you guys did. And believe me its not easy at my OLD AGE. But what the fuck, I guess I had it coming to me. All I can do is sit back and laugh a bit.......nope I wont cry!
I can take the complaints, but just one favor, I'm a stickler on spel lin. Correct the typos.
Meantime I'll find something else for you guys to rip apart, this old ass is getting old, a new one may not be a bad idea.
THOM, TOM, THOMAS, TOMMY




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