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vacation (Free verse) by geewhiz1962

Sometimes I wonder, sometimes I try. Ponder what will happen, now till I die. I rise and I go, live like a machine. Day in and day out, what does it mean? If I had the time, if I had the cash. Wouldn't be so down, I could throw a bash. The weekends with junior, nights with my gal. Needing something special, make me go wow. I guess I should be happy, even content. The week has gone by, my money all spent. What did it buy me? Another weeks meals. Stack of frozen dinners, the Doctor's little pills. Why was I put here? What a strange situation. Give me a break, I need a vacation.

SupremeDreamer 7-Jul-03/8:16 PM
the rewrite is alot better than the original. heres an 8. btw, you really need to have a better attitude concerning commentry, because changing titles to erase a low vote is a pathetic response. Plus, giving me a low rating when i respond to it by sticking a zero on your work is childish... doesnt make you look intelligent. dont take this comment to be pompous in nature, but i do admit sadly that it does seem that way. Im just trying to give you some advice not to step on you, but to help you.




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