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News Values (some time last November) (Sonnet) by Nicholas Jones

Switch on TV; let's hope there is something That will divert me from all of this shit Shut out all of my worries concerning The modern world and what goes on in it But then: NEWSFLASH; this programme is delayed We interrupt our schedules to bring you Despatches from the front line of today Reports on happenings that must be viewed. This could be anything, I think, could be Explosions, war: I see inside my head Destruction from the air or from the seas Please Lord, let there not be too many dead. But then the headline comes and they tell me Butler who did not steal has now been freed.

andrewjthomas 5-May-03/10:29 AM
very well structured, very nice iambic and ryhme
i would suggest working on the couplet at the end... it feels a little stilted




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