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Sorry for all the things (Free verse) by Mutant_X

I'm sorry for all the words i've said. I'm sorry for all the tears i've shed. I'm sorry for all the love i never showed you. I'm sorry for all the truth i never told you. It gets me mad To know i've hurt you that bad. I was lost in the way that i hated you , And sacred by the way that i loved you. Forgive me for walking away. Try to understand,i could no longer stay Tapped between the urge,the need to leave And the desire to hold you,love you everyday. Quietly captured by the voices in my head They torture me every night as i lie down in my bed I wish i can be stronger I wish i can set myself free Of all the fears that lived inside of me I can't take them any longer. Please forgive me for saying sorry As it hurts to know, You never will Please don't hate me, As i will love you always still.

Mr Pig 11-Apr-03/8:08 AM
A good try at the suicide genre but the repetition and use of cliches adds nothing to our imagination as its a tell all poem, however I bequeath thee a 6.




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