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Man In A Street (Free verse) by kalikopeli

"If I had a canvas, I would paint it blue 'cause blue is the best color that reminds me of you. If I had a mattress, I would lean it against the wall 'cause nobody's sleeping here just memories of a lover six feet tall. If I had a cigerrette, I would light it with a match 'cause the flicker burns brightly red, like strawberries in a patch. If I had a pencil, I'd crossout your name, 'cause your name is abusive, rude and it plays these games.", said the drunk man in a corner of a bulevard across the street. And I think to myself never take too seriously nor neglect, the feelings of a man you've listened to, yet never met.

marvelis 10-Apr-03/5:17 PM
Personally it's not that bad. I mean some of the lines don't rhyme which is bad, in my own opinion. But the idea is so unique it tends to overshadow the lack of rhyme, partially at least.




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