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we wear the cries (Free verse) by silvertongueddevil

we wear the cries of settling birds and pick the closing flowers we farewell our shadows until we will see them again tomorrow laying together we add to our count of falling stars and name our constellations we wonder why is the night a sad thing and how is it that it seeps into our kisses and how does it work its way between our tangled limbs

silvertongueddevil 14-Jul-02/7:59 PM
the problem with among is that it is not divisive enough. the sadness of the night they feel isn't just hanging around passively "among" their limbs, it is really between them, it is that sadness, that sense of loss, fear of loss that is holding them apart..




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