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endless eternity: (Free verse) by Sapphire

waves crash a steady beat pounding shores in rhyme time suckles of mother natures teat all the while man remains blind the shifting sands run through a slick channel lost souls still wander the ages a taste rolls in mouths of unwary - banal yet they never see they are within cages

Angel_of_fait 9-Jul-02/12:42 AM
hhhmmmmm needs more though i think and it is really good buttwo parts crash together and well that is just my opinnion..




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