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Of Curves and Straight Lines (Free verse) by Quarton

Straight lines drawn, meeting in right angle fetish; harsh symmetry reflected, ninety degree penchant, sharp and abrupt vision to brain. Shortest distance from here to there. Direct route, stripped down, no frills; been there four right angles before. Curves, banked and winding, meandering; easy on the psyche, relative understanding. Light bent gently, attracted--refracted by gravity's sure embrace. Soft, natural curvature, fingers running--tracing, a lover's hand embracing. Road ahead tightening; spinning--careening out of control. The artist, brush in hand, pondering--visualizing, deft strokes from A to B. Direct or wandering, line perhaps spiraling or one dimensional, straight line confining. Nature's scope unbounded, flowing--undulating, Crick and Watson expounded. Double-helix; twists and curves, in profusion cloning; genetic perfection--reflection; God's image everywhere. Straight line mentality, linear thinking--measuring, over-analysing; dead end reality--commonality. Blinders firmly attached; gazing straight ahead. Cubism, Pablo's idealism, three dimensional, fragmented; perception's unique imagining. Conceptual realism with superficial sightings, heads in unison nodding; blank stares and dogs barking, trespassers beware. Earth's curvature astounded, simplistic--realistic; straight lines prone, reality reclining--defining and confounded. Cubism applied conceptually like the moon and stars, tiny orb rising--rounded. Circular reality--duality, projectile spinning, curving-returning; life's round about learning. Vortical winds blowing, earth rotating and solar system revolving; light sustaining sunlight shining--defining. Milky Way turning--burning, black holes gravity defying; galaxies circling in clusters like atoms in microcosm. Electrons in orbit whirling; matter implying--surmising energy's presence--essence. No curves or straight lines to compare-- no substance anywhere.

<~> 1-Dec-02/1:08 PM
de nada. it's not so much the technique i take issue with, as it works beautifully for you. i think you could have gotten there more efficaciously. my mood of late has been one of elimination, and my comments are reflecting that. my own writings--well, i am editing down to nil, so i have not been posting as much. i'd be honored if you looked at my stuff. thanks. z




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