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Dad (Free verse) by Someone

He claims to be your dad and that he loves you and that he wants to see you but then when he gets the chance he doesn't come and he doesn't ever call. Why? I guess no one will ever know the answer to that. Will we? Isn't your dad suppose to love you and be there for you? Or is that something that I have made yp in my head? He says that hw doesn't come to visit because of your mom. But the last time he saw you he beat your bro. So that is all bull shit. Your mom may tell him no he can't come and see you but she has a good reason and it was his fault not hers. He makes no sense and you don't understand him. No one does.

god'swife 19-Nov-02/11:38 AM
Get rid of the rhetorical questions. They add nothing except making you sound pitiful, which is very uninteresting. Your problem is interesting, so I'll take this scrap heap and write a poem about it for you later this afternoon.




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