Poemranker [Replying] Thu Nov 21 22:13:55 PST 2024

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Daniela (Free verse) by little_angel_maria

Oh Daniela you've let me down, you're shite as a best friend , so what if I smoked, that's nothing to do with what your dad did to me. You're a really shite best friend you know. You told the court lies about me and also said my personal life,just to hide the fact of what your dad has done to me. Daniela I loved you, treated you, cared for you, But now all I have to say is fuck you!!

god'swife

22-Oct-02/10:47 AM

"said my personal life"? What is that? ".. the fact of what..." terrible. "I treated you" to lunch, kind, what? Fix your errors. If you weren't such a brat, and could listen to critism without having a fit, maybe you would learn something. I sympathize with your situation, I was raped at 13 and then fell into many abusive relationships with older men because of it, but that's no excuse for bad grammer. Now stop whining and open your eyes to the fact that your writing, at this point, needs serious coaching. I think you just need to give yourself a few years before you start posting this stuff. Write all you want, keep it somewhere and then come back to it and make something beautiful out of it, this is tripe. I also suggest you move to an area with better schools if you can. Here in the states they have a victims relocation program, you shouldn't have to go to the same school you were going to before this happened. I'm assumng you're still in school. Does everyone in your neighborhood know this happened to you? Get some counselling, before you start acting out like I did. Poemranker is not an appropriate place for you to be discussing this shit right now.

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