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Don't Think Of Me (Free verse) by Dariana

In my eyes you were a hero, for all you did to change my life. You brought me up from deep despair, and saved me from the strife. I asked you why, so many times, to which you would reply, It is a gift sent from my heart, no need to question why........ We were friends, I always thought, there could be no danger there. But looking back, I see your schemes, your evil and your dare. You never were my friend at all, and I never guessed it so. With lies so sweet & hide deceit, I was the last to know. It is all over now, you did not win, so better run for cover. This is how you made me pay, for not making you a lover. Move along, you tainted soul, please say no prayer for me. I am thankful that I found you out, now all the world will see. To be a hero, is to be sincere, something you just cannot be, Next time you need a target, Please do not think of me.

DreamMachine 2-Oct-02/5:55 PM
Man...Talk about being stabbed in the back!( Someone wanna twist that knife in my back around a few more times please? thankyou! )As for the transitions they are a bit sketchy but other then that they are pretty flowing and straight to the point so that makes a heck of alot of sense. Keep it up. Great Write. 9 Again!




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