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What is that causes this heightened awareness This need, want and desire to caress? The mind is a mystery creating this drive Your sensual being brings my senses alive. I fantasize often about the feel of your skin The warmth of your body, creates stirring within. There is something familiar, pleasant in your voice Forgive me my weakness, I really have no choice. I believe in now, experiencing and living I believe in the pleasure of feeling and giving. This carnal knowledge has such a driving force Will you lay down a map and plot us a course? As Camus would say, "live to the point of tears" Dispose of the rules and swallow your fears. Should you decide to come and indulge all your senses Your secret is safe, I won't knock down your fences.

Christof 23-Sep-02/3:47 AM
I liked this until the last line - I think 'fences ' is there because it rhymes with 'senses', not because it expresses best your meaning. But I like the whole existential/erotic combination. Monsieur Camus would be proud.




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