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Poem 479 (Free verse) by Nicholas Jones

Stains on the wall Remind me of you Lighting our Guy Fawkes bonfire. Love of the flames Is an eviable trait I hid inside like a household pet. You burnt my old chair On which I used to sleep, Called for Petrol or paraffin. Meanwhile, I feel that our presence can cause nothing but death, It is while we watch the fire that we cease to draw breath.

Christof 23-Sep-02/2:04 AM
The last stanza is a bit obscure, i don't quite get the progression from what's gone before. But the central stanza is excellent




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