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Watch Out (Lyric) by Nicholas Monson

Watch out, watch out for Johnny the Greek! A devil blessed with film star looks! He walks, he talks, he flies, he cooks The figures of his clients' books. Watch out, watch out for Johnny the Greek! He shines in any pub or bar. "A drink? Oh thanks, I'll have a jar!" His round comes. Heh! Where's the star? Watch out, watch out for Johnny the Greek! He's polished as a South Sea pearl. He leaves your senses in a whirl. Then - "Where's he gone?" "Oh, with your girl." Watch out, watch out for Johnny the Greek! You will (you vow) show him the door. His character has every flaw, Except one thing... he's not a bore. And so somehow you're back for more. Watch out, watch out for Johnny the Greek!

jh99 28-Feb-10/6:38 AM
I like the originality of this. I think though, that if you experimented with the rhyme scheme it could make it stronger. Maybe a chorus would help as well.




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