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Immigrant (Free verse) by Christof

The sheep gaze mournfully over the fence At the llama in the neighbouring field And wonder how the long-necked freak would feel If some time hence The llama's family in Peru Woke to find some strange and new- Fangled beast stretch out at the expense Of their living space, eat all their grass, Spit, display its high-tailed arse Prance and preen with no pretense Of being averse to their best-looking ewes. Send it home. No one approves, Except the farmer, whose plain horse-sense Finds the potential, given that The llama is adaptable, low in fat And high-yielding, is immense.

Ranger 1-Jul-07/2:59 AM
Indeed. Meter trips, and I'm not sure I like the abundance of articles in lines 1-3. After that it's good.




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