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Just Another Reason (Free verse) by Skamper

teach me a small lesson one guaranteed to fit the rules and I will make it last a lifetime frighten your children with the world shy away from discipline 'til indulgent little bubbles burst spraying cries and tantrums round the room and find the cause in the fizzy drink they had for lunch - still - your decisions wrapped in caring/loving smiles inflicted on your cossetted ofspring whining away the hours 'til another dreary program comes on television - don't turn your weary eyes to me I already learned my lesson from the pouting look upon your face

pete 22-Jun-07/11:54 PM
hi;...yeah; felt exactly the same as jessicazee about the last 3 lines; . the lead up was good enough to deserve much more ... the first 3 lines could in fact stand alone... nice changes of rhythm......7 and a half points




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