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The Call
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Free verse
) by
Skamper
The symbol of chaos stops its random spin forcing just one arrow deep within each studied tick a cadence it begins - my spiteful nose shall bleed the space once dreams have taken second place I set my tongue to talk back
lmp
12-Jun-07/9:25 AM
are you watching wheel of fortune of something? or maybe this is "the big wheel" on the price is right?
dunno, it is a bit vague. a bit more power maybe in some of the action would help bring out the meaning or intensity of being forced into a decision you do not agree with. i think this has some potential.
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