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Final Moon (Free verse) by Caducus

You touched me last night Like Sikh hands on apricots Your eyes slave white Journeyed through the voil For a moon that was average. I never touched you last night Like English hands on apples My eyes slave wet Journeyed through yours But the moon had passed. We touched again today Like surgeons on my Father Our eyes now imperial Journeyed through the voil For a sunrise that blinded us.

Dovina 10-May-07/1:27 PM
Really like; "My eyes, slave wet, journeyed through yours." Been there, done that; and that's what makes a poem.

Do you mean "voile"?




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