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Complaints (Free verse) by jessicazee

All day with the shovel, your back and the sidewalk, my hot cocoa salt stains, salty beef stews, your knee again. I tried to make a funny show with shadowed dirty hands- it was the bear, wasn't it?

half.italian 15-Feb-07/9:21 PM
I really like it. I see something clearly. Dad comes home from hard work, to a child who wants to play. He just can't handle children being children when he's tired.

I could be off, but it works for me.




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