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Complaints (Free verse) by jessicazee

All day with the shovel, your back and the sidewalk, my hot cocoa salt stains, salty beef stews, your knee again. I tried to make a funny show with shadowed dirty hands- it was the bear, wasn't it?

nentwined 15-Feb-07/6:25 PM
The bear took out my knee! Damn, I'm going to have to be more careful with what I watch.

This has something, maybe, but it's too compact for me to get it and feel what I've gotten; I think it needs a little more flesh--but that's definitely no guarantee.




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