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Complaints (Free verse) by jessicazee

All day with the shovel, your back and the sidewalk, my hot cocoa salt stains, salty beef stews, your knee again. I tried to make a funny show with shadowed dirty hands- it was the bear, wasn't it?

Dovina 15-Feb-07/7:10 AM
These sound like happy complaints of two who have worked hard and have some minor pains. That's just an impression though, because it isn't very clear. If "hot cocoa stains" are sweaty dirt on shirt, then good description.




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