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almost 12.30 (Free verse) by Dental Panic

and Walter is reading words off billboards: GIVE. BE. SLIP. FIT. Sure, he wants to but in a minute the bus arrives from Old Sincere and his mother is on it with a suitcase full of facts, dad’s remorse, jacket prayers and a glass for denture bits.

ecargo 17-Jan-07/12:26 PM
Hi DP. This is like an amuse bouche--tasty but leaves one wanting more. Full of suggestive (in a nonprurient sense) little oddities that seem to imply more, more--the last line lost me though. And I'm not sure what the tie-in with Genesis is (assuming that's why you referenced it in your amusing exchange with our resident longbeard/provocateur)--but I can be dense about such things.





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