Shuushin10 Jan 2007

oh hey, I really like the tendons of this. Sure, some typos.

If I had to change anything I'd put in more specific and interesting color words.

and a better word, or descriptive phrase (better) than "departure".

similarly - "vanquished" is iffy.

And maybe instead of the last "New Hampshire", a more specific town, or maybe a county. dunno.

Easily could be a 10 in my book.