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WITH GOD , NOT THEM (1) (Free verse) by stevopoet

WITH GOD,NOT THEM. "My case is of God Not of them in high places My prayer is of God Not for them our rulers As long as I pray to Him To provide for we of my family I have no case with them in power". Lies is it we spread around for all Deceit hovers around the land Even with churches and mosque Built all over the street in our kingdom Still nothing has changed for good Even as many mount fire on miracle And millions get redeemed in deeper life Thousands nursing fats of them in charge All on our high ways full of pot-holes Short-cut to the beyond without visa. Yet, mediocre echoes "my case is Not of Men in power but God up tower Let it soar high, prices of goods Let it becomes gold, food that we eat Let it be of diamond, water for we to drink My God will provide according to His riches". Oh yes! Oh yes brother! Exactly sister!! But amidst riches millions die of hunger With stupendous wealth, many suffers endlessly Our case is of them, the rulers not of God. Alayande Stephen Tolulope 15th August 2006 1.15am.

Ranger 11-Oct-06/1:49 AM
You've got some good ideas in here, but it could do with the rhythm tightening up and some of the lines paring down. 'Thousands nursing fats of them in charge' doesn't make sense to me. Good ending, it brings it back to the opeining quote nicely.




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