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Fall of the goblet darlings (Free verse) by Caducus

Iris shoals bobbing, smiling wire necklaces from goblet darlings bowing, to death re-decorated. Metal threads. Sewed flesh tapestries in limb frames of screams and female names. Eagles in buttoned plumes whispered ‘Danker’ in pockets left as silver Magpies. chucking lovers faces keeping warm silver. Cud wombs of after-death, three eyed heads faceless fetal whorls that stood as flesh fell as telegrams through slow motion letterboxes.

Edna Sweetlove 21-Jun-06/2:50 AM
Odd (as usual) but a fine selection of words. I prefer the English spelling of "foetal" to the somewhat anodyne US version ("fetal"). I shall give 7/10, marginally higher than your recent anonymous rating of one of my nastier pieces. Edna




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