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Shy, quiet (Free verse) by Ranger

A cagier lightning strikes with care. Cat-like cautious side-step splits purple rolling pillow sky, clouds Swift glancing light Pause- Over ground voice, left back crackles like static, moving, catches up - hovering Turns- Moves again to find the earth has spun away

LilMsLadyPoet 24-May-06/4:41 PM
Without the title I would think this was a stage or script act of a storm...I love>
"purple rolling pillow
sky, clouds
Swift
glancing light
Pause-"
The (clever) format forces one to read it in a very cool way...and imagery is fantastic.
I like the last two lines, in a literal sense: as in, the Earth spinning away and out of reach of the lightning. I see that you are being so clever/intellectual with the writing you posted while I was out and away. This one is probably not really clear at first reading...or even at all, without the title. Perhaps the lightening should be more direct and less stealthy:)




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