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My Prayer (Free verse) by dana071287

I cry, come closer to me, it is You I want to see. Flooding my life with your love, love that is sent from above. I am crying out to You, I want a heart that is new. Revealing to me Your way, from You I will not stray. Be reflected in my life. In me let a fire burn, and for You may my soul yearn, so You may take away my strife. To You alone will I pray for You to show me the way. My heart will You please renew, I want to follow you, too. I look to heaven above, and cry for more of Your love to share with the people I see, to say what You mean to me.

dana071287 12-May-06/12:27 PM
hey, thanks for the comments. I'll take a look and maybe work on some of the rhymes that I have in the poem. I'd also just like to point out that with the poem, I was also counting syllables, every line has 7, so that was a point of struggle I had in writing the poem. But thanks again for your criticism...much appreciated




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