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For Thou (Sonnet) by MacFrantic

I shan't receive another note Not once more shall I listen To every song you've ever sung I'll say it never glistened Lest this night's repose unveils The better of our sinnings May the lilted tongue destroy What nestles in beginnings Beastly looks will pass for hate Should my love be for naught Oh how can innocence be fresh Whilst honor poorly rots?

MacFrantic 9-May-06/7:22 PM
'Thee' would assume I am talking directly to the person this is for, and not to myself. Example: 'For thou...in the trees."

Also, I never used 'you' directly. I did, in fact, use 'you've' which works better for meter. Note: I used 'my', not 'mine' as well.




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